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Week One: Replay posted 16 July 2004 in Member Written WorksWeek One: Replay by drosdelnoch, Subdidact

A writers influences can usually be seen in the way that they approach a subject, I think that what you've done is set a scene quite clearly that requires further development, leaving it on a hook about but who was the man in black.

As mentioned in another critque parts of the speech seemed to want to head in one direction but seemed to have been slightly dashed, although I loved the way in which the whole piece has been set out. I personally have a had time writing speech for characters and feel that parts of it are clunky when I do it, you seem to have the right idea with it as the characters appear to be interacting quite well.

Keep up the good work. view post


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